Get your claws ready #mfrwhooks

I, Effing Feline, love shredding things with my claws. It’s not only good exercise, it’s good for the soul. Today I offer you the chance to shred. The shreddee is the blurb for book one of pet human’s WIP trilogy. Unleash your inner wildcat — cut Ed’s ego down to size — make as many suggestions as you can.

The Seven Foot Cupid

Book One in the Passion Island Trilogy
A locked-in-a-room future romance

Ember prides herself on handling anything her newly colonized planet can throw at her. It’s her job to deal with dangers like exploring new territory and controlling fierce animals that might hurt the colonist’s safety. After a head injury shakes her confidence, she’s determined to prove herself again. She gets her chance when ordered to explore a mysterious cave in a wilderness mountain. Until that’s done, the last thing she needs is a new, distracting man.

Tyler, an explorer from her town’s fierce rival, is sent on the same task. Like Ember, he’s been in an accident…but he was the only survivor. Guilt over the loss of his team eats away at him, and he can’t even discuss or face up the accident. When he meets Ember, he’s drawn not only to her beauty and toughness, but by her ability to deal openly with her accident. He doesn’t need a woman in his life. He needs Ember.

Booker, a naïve Apprentice Cupid, works for the organization that financed the colony’s trip from Earth. It works secretly to improve the gene pool by arranging for people with desirable genes to fall in love. His first assignment—Ember and Tyler. His strategy—lock them in an abandoned cabin for a few days. With nothing else to pass the time, they may produce a child, right?

He doesn’t realize he’s locked them in with the fiercest, most intelligent native beast ever discovered. To survive, Tyler and Ember must overcome their pasts and work together.

And love, they discover, can help you survive.

Sharpen those claws and go!

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14 comments

  1. Well, that was interesting. So will the experiment prevail?

    1. Well, this is a love story, so . . . draw your own conclusions.

  2. Hi, Ed,

    This sounds interesting, but I think you’re giving too much away in the blurb.I think you could cut it by about 50% and make it both tighter and more intriguing.

    Just my 2 cents.

    1. Yes, I tend to agree with you. My blurbs are usually shorter, and many of them are 50% shorter. But what to cut, what to cut.

  3. How about this
    Ember prides herself on handling any dangers her newly colonized planet can throw at her. After a head injury shakes her confidence, she’s determined to prove herself. She gets her chance when ordered to explore a mysterious cave in a wilderness mountain. The last thing she needs is a new, distracting man.
    Tyler, an explorer from her town’s fierce rival, is sent on the same task. Like Ember, he’s been in an accident…but he was the only survivor. Survivor guilt eats away at him. When he meets Ember, he’s drawn not only to her beauty and toughness, but by her ability to deal openly with her accident. He doesn’t need a woman in his life. He needs Ember.
    Booker, a naïve Apprentice Cupid, works for the organization that financed the colony’s trip from Earth. It works secretly to improve the gene pool by arranging for people with desirable genes to fall in love. His strategy for Ember and Tyler – lock them in an abandoned cabin for a few days. With nothing else to pass the time, they may produce a child, right?
    Unknowingly, he’s locked them in with the fiercest, most intelligent native beast ever discovered. To survive, Tyler and Ember must overcome their pasts and work together.
    And love, they discover, can help you survive.

  4. Great premise, Ed.

    1. This is an attempt to bring Cupid into the science fiction realm.

  5. New blurb reads better. The story sounds very interesting

    1. Ed Judi Hoornaert · · Reply

      That’s what I hoped to hear.

  6. henhousepublishing · · Reply

    Interesting. The blurb does intrigue, leaving me with the question of the beast. Perversely, I tend to root for the beast.

    1. Ed Judi Hoornaert · · Reply

      Rooting for the beast, you say? Then you should enjoy it’s projected future in the final book of this trilogy. I say projected because the book isn’t written, just outlined with the first two chapters drafted. But by the end, the beast (and its family!) become stars.

  7. I think I like your rewritten one better.

    Beverley

    1. Ed Judi Hoornaert · · Reply

      I do too. Thanks for confirmation.

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