Except for my bosom #mfrwhooks


As they say in the commercials . . .

New title, same great book

I ran a poll on my Sunday blog and my WIP’s ungainly title, Audra Fleeing Audra Finding, is now history. By an overwhelming vote, the title is now Alien Contact for Runaway Moms.

In the near future, a duplicate of Vancouver Island has appeared off Washington State. The inhabitants are Kwadrans — Native Americans from a scientifically advanced alternate Earth. Their Earth was polluted, climate-changed, and nearly uninhabitable.

Today’s hook picks up from last week’s. Duchess Opsie Beaverpaw agreed to lead the search for a young mother from Portland who fled her abusive lover to Kwadra. Before starting the search, Opsie has a visitor she doesn’t recognize.

“Can’t you guess who I am?”

Opsie threw up her hands. “Rumpelstiltskin?” When the young woman still volunteered nothing, she added, “You’re enjoying this, aren’t you?”

“I’m afraid so. I’ve been called difficult and contrary, though I have no idea why.” She expressed her bafflement with a dainty headshake. “When I was younger, I heard ‘brat’ nearly as often as my name.”

Brat was more than enough of a clue. “Delfina Eaglesbrood! I haven’t seen you in an least six inches of height. You came up-island with the queen, I assume?”

The sophisticated fashion model disappeared under a vivacious grin. “Yes, and I have a favor to ask.”

“For the king’s favorite cousin, anything. It’s been a couple of years since I saw you. All grown up now, I see.”

“Except for my bosom.” The girl — for she was just fourteen — looked down at her chest and sighed.

“I used to call you Elfy.”

Another sigh, and the model was back, looking pained. “Please don’t.”

“What can I do for you . . . Elfy?”

Be sure to check out the hooks by other great writers in the Book Hooks blog hop.

Alien Contact for Runaway Moms

She’s running from an abusive lover . . . but what is she running to?

When her abusive lover threatens to take custody of her baby, Audra Verhailey flees where even he can’t follow: the aliens’ forbidden cities underneath Kwadra Island.

But can the safe isolation she wants for her daughter survive a search party, a gang of alien criminals — and the love of an emotionally damaged Kwadran?

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8 comments

  1. Fourteen is a tough age!

    1. Indeed it is! About all I remember about it is that had my first girlfriend. (Not in the sexual sense, I hasten to add in case she’s reading this.) I still keep in touch with her via e-mail.

  2. the new title is intriguing.

    1. Thanks! It’s a collaboration between me and my wife. She is pretty good at this sort of thing; I guess I’ll keep her.

  3. janwal · · Reply

    Love the new title. This bit made me chuckle. I remember a shopping trip with my two daughters and that brought more laughter

    1. Thanks for the positive reinforcement. The passage is intended to be humorous in passing, though not ha-ha funny.

  4. I love the dialogue! The new title is also fun.

    1. Elfy was an important character in book 2, Alien Contact for Kid Sisters, so I had fun revisiting her as a teenager.

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