I can’t believe it’s been a month since I hooked up with Book Hooks. Tempus, she does fugit.
I currently have not one but two WIPs, which is terribly unwise — but while I usually hold sway over my Muse, sometimes she throws me curve balls and strikes out my commonsense.
Here’s the very opening of one of them. Working title: Secrets of Love and War.
Cynthia O’Connor lowered her wading boot almost to the water. She paused theatrically on one foot, ready to grab a blue-stemmed tilm sapling in the unlikely event that she lost her balance. She’d get scolded if she came home with her best tunic soaked, and she hated being scolded.
Still posing, she tilted her head as though listening for Twisted Lizard Lagoon’s namesake monster to awaken. But the monster wasn’t real — or so she was told — and she heard only the gentle drone of insects and the whisper of follow-fish breaking the surface as they watched her, curious.
Any creature smarter than a follow-fish might realize Cynthia was playing another of her games. In this case, she wanted to make as few ripples as possible when stepping into the lagoon’s diamond-clear water. She loved turning everyday actions into games. Most Riksids, and certainly all humans, would take one look at her womanly curves and assume she was too old for silly games.
She played them anyway.
In a couple of paragraphs, the hero makes his appearance and all hell breaks loose, so this is the calm before the storm. Don’t worry about terms like ‘follow-fish,’ and ’tilm.’ It’s a sci fi adventure, and I made these throw-away terms up to create a sense of otherworldliness.
‘Riksids’ are the aliens who inhabit this planet, so readers will hear a lot more about them. I’m not wedded to that name. Any of you have opinions about the name?
What do you think? Do you get a sense of Cynthia’s personality? Be sure to check out the book hooks by other great writers in the Book Hooks blog hop.