Maybe She Should Run #MFRWHooks

Welcome to the Marketing for Romance Writers blog hop, Book Hooks. Writers share a short snippet of their works to entice you.

I’m continuing to highlight Rescuing Prince Charming, a science fiction romance that will be released December 4. Last week I showed you the back cover blurb. Today, you’ll see the very opening of the book.

Time: Four years from tomorrow.

Place: A top-secret, underground facility on a Pacific Northwest island that doesn’t exist…yet.

—————

Dusty Johnson really didn’t want to do this.

She took a deep breath, trying without success to dispel the dread clogging her belly. Some women daydreamed of rescuing princes from dragons. Not her.

Yet here she was, all alone, creeping through the dark guts of the half-built starship, searching for a time bomb about to explode. If the siren ordering evacuation of the research facility had summoned the expected herd of guards, she would’ve offered advice then fled with the rest of the staff. Having come this far, though, she couldn’t leave without branding herself a coward in her own eyes.

And so she slunk fearfully around machinery that smelled of oil and ozone. Nothing was neat and tidy down here; in a prototype, speed and ingenuity trumped meticulous design. Everything was makeshift, a giant kludge sprawling through three-thousand cubic yards. That meant a lot of places for saboteurs to hide a bomb, but only two where technicians wouldn’t discover it in the course of a workday.

The first hiding place was a niche behind the backup life support nexus. Staring into its shadows, she paused. A heroine wouldn’t hesitate, but an ordinary, everyday woman would think twice about squeezing into a dirty cranny while wearing a new, cream-colored chambray skirt with filigree trim.

Maybe she should just walk away.

Or run.

What do you think? Would this hook you if you browsed the book?

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17 comments

  1. Very intriguing opening.

  2. like this! interesting hook.

    1. Glad you could stop by, Kayelle.

    1. What a nice thing to notice. Thanks, Kris.

    1. So cool that I think I’ll go put on a sweater.

  3. Love the last bit – about the difference between a heroine and a regular person.
    Tweeted.

    1. At this point in the book, she’s putting a toe in the waters of heroism, rather than accepting it as part of who she is.

  4. The time/place markers had already caught my interest. And I love her contrast between a heroine and an “ordinary, everyday woman.”

    1. I used this sort of opening in two of the three previous novels (all of them standalones) in the Alien Contact for Idiots series. I answers a lot of questions right up front, while raising one, as well.

      1. Sounds like a good way to orient the reader, plus set them up to expect that little extra. Good thinking!

  5. I’ve got to read some of your stuff, Ed. I like each excerpt better than the last.

    Signing up to follow your blog…

    1. You are now my new favoritest woman in the world, Lisabet. (Don’t tell my wife!)

  6. Also forgot to say above, I love the series name.

    1. I have to admit that I love it, too. So much of the time I have trouble with titles. Back when I wrote for Silhouette then never liked my titles so I just slapped any old meaningless title (“Step from a Dream”) on one MS — and that’s the one title of mine they used. Go figure.

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