Effing Feline has something in his eye

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Fart-Fueled Flying Feline, Effing for short, writes the Weekend Writing Warrior posts on Mr. V’s behalf

In my infinite wisdom, I, Effing Feline, chose another ten-sentences from Ed Hoornaert’s The Trial of Tompa Lee.

It follows closely on last week’s snippet. Our lowly heroine, Tompa Lee, has been framed for terrorism on an alien planet, and Dante Roussel, a Space Navy policeman, was ordered to turn her over to cruel Shon justice. In this snippet, she arrives at her courtroom after being pelted by a mob with spit, garbage, and unidentifiable alien filth.

But she has survived her ordeal. Tompa Lee always survives.

Thrown off-balance by the handcuffs, Tompa stumbled and landed in a sprawl, her cheekbone exploding in pain as it smashed the floor.

“Get her off the floor.”

It was a male voice, familiar: Roussel, the flickin’ roach who’d pushed her into the goddamned arms of the maggoty Shons even though the Space Navy never, ever, yeah right, abandoned poor souls to aliens. She fought his two henchmen, flailing and kicking, but they lifted her like an empty garbage can and dumped her on her feet. Something warm and salty dribbled onto her lips. Blood, she hoped, because all other possibilities were too disgusting to contemplate.

“Dear God,” Roussel whispered.  He got out his handkerchief, red initials in old-fashioned embroidery, and dabbed spit and filth from her face.

She went salsa, screaming and jerking her knee toward her tormenter’s balls … but he merely grunted as her knee struck his thigh.

What a time to miss.

Effing Feline again. Tompa has nowhere to go but up right? I hope, I hope? Even I feel sorry for her, and I’m a crusty old cat who really, truly doesn’t give a hairball for any of the silly old characters in Mr. V’s books.

No, that was not a tear. Cats don’t cry!

While I compose myself, go read the snippets by other great weekend writing warriors.

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A WOMAN
B-Trial paperbackTompa Lee is a homeless ‘street meat’ who has clawed her way up to the bottom-most rung of the Space Navy . . . but her dream job plummets into a nightmare when she’s framed for mass murder on an alien planet.

A MAN
Dante Roussel is the Navy policemen who surrenders Tompa to the Shons . . . but he is horrified to learn that their justice requires trial-by-combat–and Tompa must conquer three hundred accusers.

AN ALIEN
Awmit is an old, lower-class Shon who is the sole witness to Tompa’s innocence . . . but to prove it, he must find the valor and the strength to fight to the death at her side.

AN UNFAIR TRIAL
Can Tompa learn to trust and love not only a member of the alien race that wants to slaughter her . . . but also the policeman who betrayed her to cruel alien justice?

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The Trial of Tompa Lee is the first book in The Trilogy of Tompa Lee.

B-Trial paperbackThe Trial of Tompa Lee
Only her enemies can save her from alien injustice.
(The book is free, so you can’t go wrong. Click. Buy. Read. Write a review. Rejoice, because there is more!)

C-TribulationsThe Tribulations of Tompa Lee
Goddess or Madwoman?  Even Tompa isn’t sure any more.

D-TriumphThe Triumph of Tompa Lee
Now the prey stalks the hunter — to the death.

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59 comments

  1. AWESOME: Blood, she hoped, because all other possibilities were too disgusting to contemplate.

    1. What do you means awesome? Don’t you mean awful? It made even the cat cry!

      1. It was a wonderfully written sentence! Great internal dialogue. Great attitude. (Blood=generally not awesome).

  2. I love the tone of this book Ed. This piece is no exception. Attitude galore!

    1. Yes, Kim, Tompa has tons of attitude. By the end of the trilogy, she’s even learned to channel her wild outbursts.

  3. I like her! Feisty as they come. I can hardly wait to read this book.

    And yeah…what a time to miss!

    1. I sure hope you enjoy the book, Teresa!

  4. Karen Michelle Nutt · · Reply

    lol- Yes, what a time to miss. As usual, I enjoyed your snippet.

    1. When I wrote this, I remember enjoying the hint that she doesn’t usually miss.

  5. chellecordero · · Reply

    I love the visual I got with the line “She went salsa, screaming and jerking her knee…” That poor girl.

    1. Poor girl is right. Her plight got a tear even from Effing Feline.

  6. Poor Tompa! I did like the image of her going all salsa on him.

    1. The great spiciness of the salsa is, I hope, implied.

  7. daezarkian · · Reply

    Your use of imagery in this except is exceptional!

    1. I’m naturally a wordsmith who has had to work hard at turning myself into a storyteller.

  8. Excellent snippet, but I particularly liked, “They lifted her like an empty garbage can and dumped her on her feet.” Loved the garbage can/dumped metaphor.

    1. It’s appropriate for the situation, isn’t it? She’s getting treated like garbage.

  9. lol – she went salsa – great imagery.

    1. Makes me hungry for a taco.

  10. Rough as things are for Tompa, I’m beginning to suspect she can take care of herself. Poor Dante on the other hand, with his fancy hankie . . . This is a clearly a match made in alien hell.

    1. Or heaven, Christina, or heaven!

  11. Oh no, she missed! This can’t bode well for Tompa. I love the description of her going salsa.

    1. That seems to be a popular phrase.

  12. I agree with Christina! Great visuals and great atmosphere – that’s not easy to do, so kudos on that!

    1. This scene was so vivid in my mind when I was writing it. That helped tremendously.

  13. I think WordPress ate my comment, but I agree with Christina. Great visuals here and great atmosphere – that’s not easy to do, so kudos for pulling it off!

    1. Thank you for feeding WordPress.

  14. ew – something salty on her lips – blood – she hoped….ew what a fabulously disgusting but real visual.

    1. My love of shocking imagery did NOT stand me in good stead back when I was writing contemporary romances for Harlequin. It feels good, now, to let it out.

  15. eww. so hoping she busted her lip and nothing else. good on her fighting back though

    1. Yeah, but whom does she attack? The one person who’s trying to be nice.

  16. You’re having fun with this story. I can tell and I’m loving the way you write.

    1. Aside from the early romances I wrote for Silhouette, The Trial of Tompa Lee is my most popular work, so I guess you’re on to something.

  17. She certainly not taking it quietly!

    1. Tompa never takes anything quietly. It’s her defining characteristic. Lash out, fight, strike…she’s not a kick-ass heroine so much as a kick-crotch heroine.

      1. I laughed out loud in my sleeping house when I read, “kick-crotch heroine!”

      2. You have to admit it’s a more effective way of dealing with recalcitrant men than kicking their bums.

  18. evelynjules · · Reply

    Well, this was certainly an action-packed excerpt! Love this bit especially: ‘She went salsa….’. I get such an amusing visual. lol

    1. I’m getting the impression I hit the jackpot with the salsa image.

  19. I really love her voice–so clear and unique! You get such a sense of who she is in just a few sentences.

    1. I love my characters. I may not always bring them to life as successfully as with Tompa, but I strive for the perfect response and the perfect image to illuminate their personalities.

  20. I actually feel a little sorry for Dante- when those cuffs come off, he’s in for a world of hurt. Go Tompa!

    1. Yeah, Dante’s a bit over matched–especially since we learn that he’s handicapped by brain damage from an earlier Space Navy accident. Throughout the book, it’s Tompa’s salsa against his bulldog tenacity.

  21. What a time indeed!! I hope she’ll be alright once the adrenaline wears off–I’m a bit worried about that fall and the blood. (Assuming the more disgusting contemplations don’t turn out to be right! Ew!)

    1. With 300 Shons eager to kill her, a little fall and muck is almost the least of her worries….

  22. “She went salsa” LOL, I love it. Great scene. Very intense.

    1. Now all she needs are some chips, right?

  23. She’s a spirited girl, but I think maybe she has a friend in that room. “She went salsa” is a great line.

    1. Perhaps she does…but who is it she attacks? More spirits than smarts at this point. She’ll learn, though, I promise you.

  24. “She went salsa.” Love it! I’ve gone salsa too 😉

    1. Personally, I’d prefer to go FOR salsa, rather than what Tompa went through.

  25. I get why she hates him, but responding so violently to him trying to clean her up is not helpful.

    1. Exactly, Caitlin, exactly. Unfortunately, she has long and unhappy memories of other policemen back in Manhattan — she grew up on the streets — and she has a lot to get over.

  26. There is nothing I don’t love about this snippet, Ed. I was right there with Tompa – I have my own memories of being forcibly mistreated, and I don’t do well with being restrained or touched against my will….I’m glad she missed, for his sake, but what I moment for her –

    I’m glad she’s going to grow and learn to channel her salsa-ness!

    And Efffing, your secret is safe with me.

  27. Dramatic and vivid scene. I really feel for her and I’m sure things aren’t going to get much better for awhile but her time will come. Great snippet!

    1. I’ve told Effing to select only dramatic scenes such as this one. Whenever he picks a quiet scene instead, he curls up and goes to sleep before he finishes.

  28. Great scene! And written so well! Awesome visuals! And I love that Effing picks these and posts on your behalf. 🙂

    1. Thanks, X. I’ll pass the compliment on to Effing; since he doesn’t get paid to read the comments, he doesn’t bother. I’m very lucky to have a literary-minded puss.

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